Coherence in a Thesis

Writing a dissertation and thesis requires storytelling that is coherent and straight forward. Check the example below and identify (1) the lack of coherence, and (2) suggestions to improve it.

What is the problem?

- There are regular water supply disruptions at my condominium.

What do you already know about the problem?

- on average, water supply disruption lasts 2 days
- the water tank is not big enough to hold 2-days worth of water

What is the limit or weakness of the knowledge?

- the 2-day average is based on Selangor's record, but my condominium is in Kelantan

What are you going to solve the problem?

- I'll study the relationship between water supply disruptions and stress level

What is the significance of your research?

- It will increase the awareness about water supply disruptions among households in Selangor and Kelantan

What answer did you get?

- The longer the duration of water supply disruptions, the higher the stress level

What are the suggestions from your study?

- Regular briefings and updates from Menteri Besar is an effective way to manage the people's stress level.
- Menteri Besar should not show abundant water supply at their own house

What is the implication of your study?

- condominiums in Kelantan needs bigger water tanks to reduce stress among the people
- policies regarding water supply need to be revised to take into account the people's experiences of stress

Coherence is important to link logically all parts of the thesis.